Show Don't tell
What does this mean?
It's like seeing is believing. You must show someone for them to believe rather than just telling.
Rewrite these sentences to show not tell
The buildings are tall.
The constructions tower over me
Sarah was really upset
You could see the misery pour from her eyes
She was so happy to see him
Her face lightened in his presence
The lake was beautiful
The lake sparkled from the gaze of the sun
The guests praised me when I entered with food
I could saw the bright burning inferno as it turned everything to a crisp
I saw a large man walk past me with his large black bushy beard and combed short hair.
The firepit quickly turned the cold dark colored room a warm bright welcoming yellow.
Sensory Settings:
The grey-colored concrete walls provided no heat. My fingers froze to the point they were so numb I felt nothing. I tasted blood although It couldn't be actual blood. The sounds were so incredibly loud my ears rung for days.
It was ginormous. It stood 4500 feet tall and cost somewhere around 7 billion dollars. It was labeled the 2024 tower of man. It had 4 food courts, every single food was chosen by civilians and I can say the food taste amazing.
The stone-built hut stood alone in the hilly grass field. The grass grew tall and was very bright green. You could smell fresh flowers, you could hear birds chirping.
Setting backdrop:
The sun-scorched any living creature in sight. The sand was blown by the raging wind. Tumbleweeds moved so quickly they could kill. A sandstorm formed removing all the sand from the area along with any insects that survived the sun. Their legs still moving as they seemed terrified.
Creating A Character:
Name: Eve Constable
Age: 24
Height: 5'9
Eye color: Green
Physical appearance: Average body size
Unique physical attributes: None
Favorite clothing: Leather
Where do they live and what's it like: She lives in Scotland and it's a very posh part of town.
Defining gestures: Very quick eye movement
Things about their appearance they would most like to change: Muscle
Speaking style: Calm, average speed, not annoying.
Pet peeves: none
Fondest memory: First time gaming
Hobbies/interests: Gaming, hanging out with friends.
Special skills/abilities: None
Insecurities: None
Quirks: None
Temperament: Easily annoyed
Negative traits: None
Things that upset them: Singing
Things that embarrass them: Parents
This character is highly opinionated about: privacy
Any phobias: None
Things that make them happy: Music, gaming, friends
Family: Loud, annoying
Deepest darkest secret: None
The reason they kept things hidden for so long: People are annoying
Other people's opinions of this character (What do people like about this character?
What do they dislike about this character?): Enthusiastic and helpful - Talkative at times
Favorite bands/songs/type of music: Nirvana, three days grace - I hate everything about you - rock, metal
Favorite movies: None
Favorite tv shows: None
Favorite books: None
Favorite food: Pizza
Favorite sport: Rugby
Political views: None
Religion: Atheist
Physical health: Average
Dream vacation: Bed
Description of their house: Old, wooden, barely standing
Description of their bedroom: Full of posters, dark
Any pets: None
The best thing that ever happened to this character: Becoming an adult
The worst thing that ever happened to this character: Dad died
Superstitions: None
Three words to describe this character: Friendly, enthusiastic, careless
If a song played every time this character walked into the room, what song would it be: Back in black
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Reflection
I learned there is a lot of different information needed to create a character. I can write characters for stories easier now. I enjoyed thinking about the details for my character and trying to base it on a certain person or just thinking randomly. I enjoy writing whatever I want, just being able to write a story without any restrictions.
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